All good except the "Serials at any time".
My recommendation...
Put them as a normal phrase, no over the top spacing or break, just simply "Serials at any time."
Then remove the outer glow, as the background does not mix well with glows.
Then add a 1 pixel black stroke to the text.
This is a quick knock up (it very badly edited due to time and ability

). Without the originals, it was hard, but this is roughly how I would have it...
The area inside the red box would have lighting, but I couldnt be bothered attempting to add it again
As you can also see, I have brushed over it using the "Burn tool" to make the image a lot darker (yours was a little to light for me

)